In their advertising , businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? do you think it is a positive or negative development ?

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Nowadays ,
businesses
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are
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starting
and growing tremendously. Especially , the
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enterprises. Unlike in the past , currently
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businesses
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are giving importance to their
products
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by advertising.
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, there are many positive
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,
as well as
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negative
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occurs.
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this
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issue in detail. On the one hand ,
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entrepreneur’s
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entrepreneurs
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are keen to sell their
products
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and expand their business.
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, advertising is the best option to sell it promptly.
As a result
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, emphasizing that their
products
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are unique and excellent.
For instance
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, a milk company advertise as their
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milk
kinds of milk
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are the one and only good
milks
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milk
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available in that region.
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, A soap company would advertise as their product smells good and you will have that
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throughout your day.
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, exaggerating their
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in advertising would be able to reach more
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customers
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as well as
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to sell their
products
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faster. To illustrate ,
people
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would benefit by knowing these
products
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through
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.
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, it makes
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people
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lives easier.
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,
people
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assume that these
advertisements
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are annoying and agitated.
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,
businesses
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constantly
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for
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people
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and
promoting
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their
products
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.
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, the same
advertisements
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are persistently being viewed on their social media
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another
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. On top
that
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of that
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,
businesses
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should promote their
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their
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products
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in
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effective way , rather than being a nuisance
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customers. In conclusion , I assume that these
advertisements
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, by those
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businesses
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has
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some positive
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,
while
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negative
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drawbacks would be considered by the entrepreneurs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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