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The two pie charts illustrate statistics of employment patterns in United Kingdom in 1992.

The two pie charts illustrate statistics of employment patterns in United Kingdom in 1992.
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The two pie charts illustrate statistics of employment patterns in
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 Kingdom in 1992. In general, we can realise that both genders had a little percentage of general labourers. As can be seen in the pie chart,
clerical
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 or related sector was interested in mostly by women(31
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).Meanwhile, the overwhelming majority of men succeed in managerial and professional jobs(36
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).By looking
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male
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 chart, we can see that craft or similar and other manual employees create
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 of the whole percentage.
According to
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both
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charts
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outcome
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,
it is clear that
 non-manual employees were more popular in female society(it is 69
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).
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 pattern appears to be opposite and different.Manual jobs a little bit went ahead of non-manuals( the difference is 52 to 48).It is interesting that other manual sums were nearly equal to each other on both sides( the difference is only one
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).
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, the managerial and professional part was actively used by these two genders, but it was more needed around
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men.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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