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The bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food export markets for last year and six years ago. summarise information and report main features, make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the Top 10 processed
food
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export
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markets
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 from the united states for
last
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year
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 and 6
years
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 ago. It can be seen that
overall
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, the largest
food
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 market was Canada with 13.2
billion
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 US
dollars
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last
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year
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 and 9.3
billion
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dollars
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 6years ago
moreover
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, the second highest
food
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export
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 market was the Rest of the world with 11.0
billion
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 US
dollars
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last
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year
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 and 6.3
dollars
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 for 6
years
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 ago respectively.
On the other hand
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, the remaining eight
markets
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Mexico
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are Mexico
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 with income of 6.1
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 and 4.0
dollars
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 for
last
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year
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 and 6
years
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 ago respectively. The least
food
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export
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markets
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 are Hong Kong and Australia with income 0.3
billion
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 US
dollars
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 for 6
years
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 ago. Compared to
last
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year
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,6
years
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 ago US processed
food
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export
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markets
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 drastically increased with income of 0.3 to 4.0
billion
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 US
dollars
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 for 6
years
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 ago and the other countries
also
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 raised for
last
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year
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, export, markets, year, years, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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