Some people think it is acceptable to use animals for the benefit of humans. Other people think it is wrong to exploit animals for human purposes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
are concerned about animal protection and animal rights.
However
, whether we should utilize
animals
for human purposes has recently caused a heated debate. In my view, it is acceptable to reasonably use
animals
for the
benefit
of mankind and impossible to completely cut down
the
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human's
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reliance on
animals
.
It is clear that
human beings are standing at the top of the food chain of
this
planet. As big fish eat smaller ones, mankind uses
animals
for its own
benefit
, which is consistent with natural law. So, it is hard to say that we are doing wrong by exploiting
animals
for our interests.
Moreover
, it is unrealistic to ban using
animals
since the history of human civilization is entwined with the history of the ways we have learned to manipulate animal resources. We have raised cattle for food, the outcomes of animal experiments have saved many lives, and
people
have even kept pets to satisfy their psychological needs. If using
animals
is prohibited, we would
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close thousands of KFC and McDonald's franchises around the world, because they are slaughtering lovely
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to make money!
Moreover
, everyone in
this
world would become a vegetarian.
This
is not to say that it is always right for
people
to use
animals
for any purpose whatsoever. Some
people
hunt wild
animals
just for fun; others kill rare
animals
for their expensive furs. Indeed, these
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are not only cruel and unnecessary, but actually against
long-term
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interests of
human
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races
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. Humans should shoulder their responsibilities of maintaining the diversity of wild
animals
and the balance of
ecosystem
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. In summary, using
animals
rationally for the
benefit
of
human
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is justified. Meanwhile, some
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that are harmful to both
animals
and humans have to be prohibited. By doing so, we can ensure that
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next generation will
also
benefit
from animal resources.
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