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The pie charts below show the electricity generation by source in China and Spain in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the electricity generation by source in China and Spain in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts display the electricity generation by source in
the
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china and in Spain in 2005 and 2015. The data is about percentage of the electricity
production
 by fuel source in
the
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France in the years 1990 and 2010.
Firstly
, In the
year
 1990
a
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the
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production
by
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a
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natural
gas
 and coal
is
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 equal it's 28%. 22% oil is been produces. Nuclear
power
 is generated
17
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% and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 is 6% only.
Secondly
, in the
year
 2010 The highest
production
is
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from nuclear
power
 is 67%. There was equal
producation
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production
protection
in
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coal and oil. The
production
 from natural
gas
 is 4% and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 is half of the natural
gas
it
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only 2%. In conclusion, there
is
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 great differences
in
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between
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 the
year
 1990 and 2010.
It is clear that
great
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a great
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differece
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difference
 is in nuclear
gas
. There is
great
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 change from the
year
 1990 to 2010.
This
 pie chart
cantains
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contains
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, year, gas, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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