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Many people nowadays live in societies where consumer goods are relatively cheap Do you thing the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, a lot of
people
 are residing in places where consumer products are not expensive.
Although
,
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 the
quality
 of these
items
 may be reduced because of low
prices
, almost everyone will be able to afford all the
goods
 that they need. I believe that the drawback of producing
less
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quality
goods
 far outweighs its benefits. A major disadvantage is the reduction in the
quality
 of these
goods
 by manufacturers.
This
 is done in order for the companies to be able to sell to
people
 at a cheap rate.
Moreover
, huge sales and great turnover are made on these
items
 sold
at the end
 of the year because more
people
 will buy them.
For example
, in the supermarket, different brands of canned foods with similar content
such
 as sauces,
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ready made
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 pasta are being sold at different
prices
.
Thus
,
goods
 that cost higher are considered to be more valuable than those sold at cheaper rates.
On the other hand
,
majority
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 of
people
 will be able to buy these
items
.
People
 who are
low income
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 earners can
also
 afford everything that
the
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they
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 need within their income. They will
also
 be able to get plenty
items
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of items
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 with little amount of money
For instance
, a person earning £1,000 in the UK in a month will be available to cater for his family's needs adequately when things are cheap. In conclusion, many
people
 are able to purchase all the
items
 that they require when they are sold at low
prices
,
however
, the
quality
 of these
goods
 should never be compromised to compensate for the cheap
prices
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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