The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
The line chart informs the jobless rates in the US and
Japan
for six years
between March
1993 and March
1999. Overall
, the unemployment rate in the US decreased significantly while
Japan
rocketed up from 1993 to 1999.
First,
it began in 7.0 per cent
of the workforce in the US in 1993. The unemployment rate plunged to nearly 5.5 per cent
in 1995. Furthermore
, it tried to move up but struggled and fluctuated between 1995 and 1997. The next years
were a dip down gradually to above 4.0 per cent
by the years
1999.
Contrasting to the US, Japan
had only above 2.0 per cent
of the workforce in March
1993. Three years
later, It rose quickly to approximately 3.0 per cent
. Thus
it became fluctuated between March
1996 to March
1998 and end up at exactly 3.5 per cent
. For the next years
, it rocketed up to above 4.5 per cent
. In conclusion, by the end of March
,
1999 Remove the comma
apply
Japan
has a higher percentage of workforce than the US.Submitted by galihw on
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