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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
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The line chart informs the jobless rates in the US and
Japan
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 for six
years
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 between
March
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 1993 and
March
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 1999.
Overall
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, the unemployment rate in the US decreased significantly
while
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Japan
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 rocketed up from 1993 to 1999.
First,
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it began in 7.0 per
cent
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 of the workforce in the US in 1993. The unemployment rate plunged to nearly 5.5 per
cent
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 in 1995.
Furthermore
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, it tried to move up but struggled and fluctuated between 1995 and 1997. The next
years
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 were a dip down gradually to above 4.0 per
cent
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 by the
years
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 1999. Contrasting to the US,
Japan
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 had only above 2.0 per
cent
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 of the workforce in
March
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 1993. Three
years
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 later, It rose quickly to approximately 3.0 per
cent
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.
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 it became fluctuated between
March
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 1996 to
March
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 1998 and end up at exactly 3.5 per
cent
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. For the next
years
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, it rocketed up to above 4.5 per
cent
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. In conclusion, by the end of
March
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,
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1999
Japan
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 has a higher percentage of workforce than the US.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, years, march, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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