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The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.

The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.
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This
 chart depicts the amount of money that had been spent
with
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 US dollars on books
four
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in four
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country
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countries
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 ( Germany,
France
, Italy, and Austria) in the
years
between1995
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between 1995
 and 2005.
Overall
, Germany showed the
upmost
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utmost
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 result all over these
years
,
while
 the least amount of money
were
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 spent
for
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on
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 books in Austria;
however
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 it saw
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a significantly
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significantly
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 change till 2005.
Likewise
,
France
 and Italy illustrated steadily rising over 10
years
. At the outset, in 1995 the greatest amount of money ( 80
million
 dollars) was spent by
Germany
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 people,
as well as
this
 index
had
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increased dramatically until 2005( almost 100
million
).
Moreover
, in
Austria
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this
 number was noted with the least point(30
million
), had risen a bit (approximately 10
million
) in 1991 and from 2001 it went up
a
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peak with 70
million
 over 4
years
.
Furthermore
, by spending close amounts in 1995,
France
 and Italy had climbed maximum till 70
million
(
France
) and 60
million
(Italy).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • amount of money
  • paid on cars
  • China
  • Vietnam
  • Thailand
  • Indonesia
  • 1995
  • 2005
  • significant increase
  • highest amount
  • steady growth
  • lowest overall spending
  • started at
  • doubled
  • nearly
  • reached
  • exceeded
  • among
  • half a billion dollars
  • conclusion
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