The charts below show the propotions of British students at one University in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the propotions of British students at one University in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2016.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts new Economics and
Philosophy
students
with
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a variety of
languages
in
university
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universities
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in the UK in 2016. It is noticeable that the highest
number
of people speaking Spanish
in
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among
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male Economic
students
were
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at
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43.6%, followed by Chinese at 24.2%. In terms of the
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for Portuguese and French were similar at 14.0% and 12.7% respectively. Japanese accounted for the least
number
of
language
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languages
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at 1.9% and the
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for other
languages
occupied only 3.6%
in
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of
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male Economic
students
. With regards to female
students
in Economics, there was approximately
a
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half of
students
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the students
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who
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speak Spanish
at
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46.7%. The
number
of French and Portuguese
speakers
were
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was
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similar to male
students
which were 16.2% and 12.4% respectively.
However
, female
students
have
less
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fewer
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numbers of Chinese
speakers
at 10.5%,
while
the higher
figure
for female
students
with
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in
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Japanese at 6.6% than male
students
and other
languages
were
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at 7.6%. When it comes to new
philosophy
students
, the percentage of Greek, German, and Italian
speakers
in male showed
the
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similarities which made up almost
quarter
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in each language (24.4%, 22.9%, and 21.4%). Followed by Latin at 15.3%, French at 12.2%, and others at 3.8%. Meanwhile, the proportion of German and Italian
speakers
consisted
at
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32.4% and 30.2%
in
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female
students
and the
figure
for French and Greek
speakers
accounted for less than
a
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half of these
speakers
. There were the least numbers in Latin and other
languages
in female
philosophy
students
.
Overall
, the
number
of new
students
who have Spanish dominated in both genders in Economics,
while
the
figure
for
philosophy
students
whom
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languages
were varied.
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