The charts below show the propotions of British students at one University in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the propotions of British students at one University in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2016.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts new Economics and
Philosophy
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students
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with
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a variety of
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in
university
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in the UK in 2016. It is noticeable that the highest
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of people speaking Spanish
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male Economic
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at
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43.6%, followed by Chinese at 24.2%. In terms of the
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for Portuguese and French were similar at 14.0% and 12.7% respectively. Japanese accounted for the least
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of
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at 1.9% and the
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for other
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occupied only 3.6%
in
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male Economic
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. With regards to female
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in Economics, there was approximately
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half of
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students
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the students
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who
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speak Spanish
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46.7%. The
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of French and Portuguese
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were
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similar to male
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which were 16.2% and 12.4% respectively.
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, female
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have
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numbers of Chinese
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at 10.5%,
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the higher
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for female
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Japanese at 6.6% than male
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and other
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were
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at 7.6%. When it comes to new
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students
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, the percentage of Greek, German, and Italian
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in male showed
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similarities which made up almost
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a quarter
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in each language (24.4%, 22.9%, and 21.4%). Followed by Latin at 15.3%, French at 12.2%, and others at 3.8%. Meanwhile, the proportion of German and Italian
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consisted
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32.4% and 30.2%
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female
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and the
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for French and Greek
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accounted for less than
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half of these
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. There were the least numbers in Latin and other
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in female
philosophy
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students
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.
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, the
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of new
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who have Spanish dominated in both genders in Economics,
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the
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for
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students
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whom
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languages
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were varied.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words philosophy, students, languages, number, figure, speakers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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