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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents.in your letter * Explain why you would like the job * Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ * Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am so glad that nursery is my job ,and I have a number of duties to perform
such
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caring
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from
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persons
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 at their
house
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.Now,I live with a family who they except me as a number of their family,in
fact
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 they are grandmother and grandfather in their family.I like my career because it is interesting that I do not require anything for
living
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, I always care
and
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 live with them. I should be a proper person to hire
,
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because I am so reliable and they counted on me. I am really conscientious
,
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since I am pretty well-informed and really competent at my job.
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,no matter what we are a close family,and when I have spare time I go out with them for sightseeing;
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,we go to the park twice a week
i
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in
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 our
neighborhood
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 and gulp in
fresh
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 air,we often go there.
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,they are my best body for me that I can turn to and count on. All the best, Amin
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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