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countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The diagram illustrates the information of
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the percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 who live in cities in
south-east Asia
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southeast Asian
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 countries, which are
Philipines
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the Philipines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia. The line chart not only provides the
procise
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precise
 data from 1970 to 2020, but
aslo
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also
 gives the predictions from 2030 to 2040. On the one hand, the citizens who live in cities in Malaysia rank No.2 in the given countries in 1970,
however
, the figure shows a constant increase since
then
, from 30% to 75% approximately,
then
 will reach its highest 80% in 2040 by prediction.
Moreover
, Indonesia
also
 shares the same trend.
On the other hand
,
Philipines
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Philippines
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 and Thailand
shows
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 small fluctuations, the number of people in cities goes up from 1970 to 1990,
then
 drops down from 1990 to 2010,
while
Philipines
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Philippines
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then
 keeps going up, Thailand shows no difference from 2010 to 2020. In conclusion, the number of citizens who live in urban areas in the given countries shows
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 tendency of increasing from 1970 to 2040, which may indicate the economy of south-east Aisa shares
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the
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 same development.
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