The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Employees and self-employed: by sex and occupation, 1992

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

Employees and self-employed: by sex and occupation, 1992
The two pie charts
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information about employees and self-employed by sex and
occupation
in Great Britain in the year 1992.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
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percentage
of females
work
in non-manual
occupation
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occupations
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than
work
in manual
occupation
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occupations
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and the reverse is true for
male
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. In
the
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non+manual occupations,
highest
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percentage
of
work
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than males are found in clerical or related type positions which is 31%.
However
,in managerial and professional positions employed
of
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female
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and
male
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are 29% and 36%.Meanwhile, the proportion of
female
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employ
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in other non-manual occupations is larger than the
percentage
of
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in
these
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occupation
. In the manual
enploy
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, the biggest
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between the two sex is in the employ of craft
works
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,
inside
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males make up 24% of the workers and
female
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females
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just 3%.
Further
,the proportion of
female
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females
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working as general
laborers
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is
very
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small
percentage
of males and females doing other
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from
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of manual
work
which is 26% and 27%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words occupation, percentage, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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