The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India.
The pie charts illustrate the types of
food
people
ate in 2008 compared with the consumption
of these,items in China
and India
in the same year.
Overall
,it is clear that
processed food
was the most common,and nuts and seeds were the less priorities
Replace the word
prioritised
food
in the world.In China
and India
,people
eat processed food
in the world.In China
and India
, people
eat processed food
mostly.
Around the world,people
prefer 41% processed food
, but nearly one-third consumption
of vegetables and fruits. Nuts and seeds consumption
was least on account of 4%,above a quarter consumption
for animal food
.
Chinese and Indian people
eat mostly processed food
, with 34% and 39% respectively 15% animal food
consumption
in China
while
it is nearly double in India
with 27%. Indian people
prefer 23% vegetables and fruits; however
, in China
, it’s 10% more consumption
. For nuts and seeds type food
, 11% consumption
in India
was also
the lowest proportion, while
19% in China
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