The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pictures provide information about
the
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Norbiton town's industrial area and predicted future improvement of the site.
It is clear that
there is a
river
passes
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that passes
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from
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the
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Norbiton town and the main plan is
making
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to make
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this
are
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area
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suitable for accommodation
in
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on
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both the south and the north
side
of
river
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the river
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.
While
the houses will replace factories in the future, some facilities
planned
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are planned
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to be built near the accommodations. In the south
side
of the
river
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,river
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it is planned to change factories and create a residential zone for people. Another plan is
extending
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the main roads inside of the town and
constructing
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a
bride
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bridge
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over the
river
to connect the south and north
side
of the
river
.
Also
, near the housing plenty of facilities
planned
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are planned
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to be built
such
as
school
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schools
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, shops, medical
centre
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centres
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and
playground
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playgrounds
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.
On the other hand
,
in
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the north
side
of the
river
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,river
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there is only farmland situated in
the
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today's map of Norbiton. But in the future with the help of the
bridge
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,bridge
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the road will
constructed
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be constructed
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on the top
side
of the
river
.
However
, another housing will be ready for accommodation near the road with decreasing the size of the farmland.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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