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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change,we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
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climate
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endanger
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the
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life on
the
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earth,
while
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and
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 some
people
 emphasize
to accept
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 it, rather than stopping it. I completely disagree with
this
 idea, because I
belive
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believe
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 that we have time to decrease the effect of humanity on the
Earth
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climate
 and solve
this
 problem. There are various actions that
goverments
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governments
government
 and
people
 take in
oder
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order
 to prevent
clmate
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climate
change
 or soften at least governments can
enaet
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enact
enter
 the
low
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law
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 to limit the
earbon
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carbon
 dioxide emissions that cause global warming. They could tax the drivers,avia
kompany
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company
 and pollutant
with''green
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with green
taxes''and
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taxes and
 invest the money to produce
cenewable
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renewable
 energy from sun,wind or water energy. As individuals, we have to try to limit
the
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our
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 contribution
on
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to
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climate
change
 by saving energy,less flying and using
publie
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public
 transport.
Furthermore
, society should
influnce
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influence
 the actions of
government
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the government
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 by voting
policy
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policies
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who
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that
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offer
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offers
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 to struggle with
climate
change
 as opposed to
people
 who prefer not to pay attention
it
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to it
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. If we tried to live with
climate
change
,
instead
 of taking measures, I believe,
consequences
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the consequences
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 would be fatal. Taking an example, I am not
optimist
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 to
be tolerate
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be tolerated
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 to rising the sea level. Millions of
people
 would be evacuated because of flood, especially,
the
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in the
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 country which did not have means of protection
of
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in
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 low-lying areas. These
people
 would lose their working and living places and they have to migrate the near cities or other countries. The potential of suffering humanity would be huge and we can undergo outbreaking
of
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famine and illnesses,
as well as
 getting stronger poverty and homelessness. In conclusion, it is clear
for
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 me
thatwe
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that we
 should tackle the issue of
climate
change
 and I do not agree to find a way to live with
climate
change
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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