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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The below pie charts compare the
proportion
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 of
water
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usage
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 in three categories agricultural, industrial and domestic in North
America
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, South
America
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, Africa, South East
Asia
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, Central
Asia
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 and
Europe
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that farming used is mostly dominant among the provided three areas in the mentioned countries,
while
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 only industry used is the largest
proportion
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 of
water
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usage
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 in
Europe
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 and North
America
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. It is
also
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 noticed that domestic use is the least
proportion
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 in both of the six countries. The
proportion
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 of
water
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usage
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 in agriculture in Central
Asia
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, Africa,
as well as
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 South East
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Asia
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,Asia
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 is 88%, 81% and 84%, respectively,
while
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 only roughly 70% of
water
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usage
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 accounted for the same purpose in South
America
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. Meanwhile, the least percentage of
water
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 used for farming purposes is in
Europe
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 and North
America
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, at 32% and 39% respectively.
However
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, North
America
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 and
Europe
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 both have the largest percentage of
water
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 used in the industrial aspect, which is more than half of the
water
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 used for it,
whereas
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 compared to the nations of
Asia
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 and South
America
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 are both below 13% in the same category.
Lastly
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, the figures for domestic use are mostly the lowest aspect in the
usage
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 of
water
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 in the provided countries, which is all less than a quarter.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, water, usage, america, asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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