Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many manufactured
food
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and drink
goods
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contain high
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amount
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of
sugars
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which causes many health issues. Sugary
goods
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should be made more expensive to motivate individuals to
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consume
less
sugar
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. I totally disagree with
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statement because
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the
price
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of sugary
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is not
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solution,
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, I would like to recommend some measures to address
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issue. On the one hand, I believe
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taxes
in
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sugary
goods
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can have a
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negative
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people
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live. To illustrate,
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most of our
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and drink in recent times contain
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sugar
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.
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,
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and juice
is
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the basic needs for every family in order to gain energy, which means
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increasing
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the
price
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of sugary
products
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can make it not affordable for
people
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.
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,
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increase
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an increase
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the
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price
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of sugary
products
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can make
people
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commit
crime
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in order to buy
it
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. On the
othe
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other
hand, I would like to suggest some solutions better than
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the
price
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of sugary
products
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. The first effective measure,
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government could launch
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an educational
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campaign in order to raise
the
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apply
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awareness among
people
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about the harmful consequences of
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consuming
too
much
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sugary
products
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.
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,
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step can make
people
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more aware
about
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their
food
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and
drinks
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habits,
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they can make
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decision about their health.
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the harsh laws to force the production companies of
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and drink to reduce the
amount
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of
sugar
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in their
goods
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is another solution.
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, the Saudi Arabia government set limits for
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the maximum
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amount
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of
sugar
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in every
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and
drinks
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drink
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for production companies.
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, I strongly disagree with the idea that
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the
price
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sugary
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of sugary
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goods
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,
however
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, I suggested some better measures to deal with
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problem
including
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, rais awareness among
public
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the public
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about
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the detrimental
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of sugary
goods
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,
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strict laws to force companies to minimize the
amount
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of
sugar
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in their
goods
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.
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