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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize and report the information.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize and report the information.
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The charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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usage
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 for different sectors including agriculture, domestic
usage
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 and
industry
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usage
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 in six different places in the world.
Overall
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,agricultural
usage
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 dominated in Africa,Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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,South
America
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.
Likewise
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, the
industry
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 sector used the highest proportion of
water
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 in both Europe and North
America
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. With regard to North
America
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,
Industry
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 occupied nearly half of the
water
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usage
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. Agricultural use allocated approximately 40% of the
overall
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water
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 consumption,
however
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, domestic use needed only under a fifth of the
overall
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 ratio.
In Contrast
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 with Europe , the
Industry
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 sector required above half.
while
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 the agricultural part and domestic
usage
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 reported roughly one
third,
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and 15 % respectively. In Africa, Central
Asia
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, Southeast
Asia
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, and South
America
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, agricultural use constituted more than 80% of the total
water
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 consumption. In South
America
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, it accounted for almost 70%. Domestic
usage
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 and the
industry
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 sector required only a small proportion, around a fifth of the
overall
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water
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usage
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 in Southeast
Asia
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. In Central
Asia
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, it amounted to approximately one in ten, and in Africa, it was less than a fifth.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, industry, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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