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The line graphe shows the average temperatures of three African cities through the year. Summarise the information by selscting and reporting the main features. and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph gives information about the average
temperature
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 differences in three different cities in Africa over the twelve months period.
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, it is noticeable that there are dramatic
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 changes in Cairo, and
Nairobi
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 and
Cape
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Town
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 experience a similar pattern of
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 movement throughout the year. Looking into details, as regards Cairo, the lowest
temperature
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 starts at 19℃ in January
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 gradually increases and reaches a peak of 35℃ in June. There is a steady decrease from 35℃ in August to 20℃ in January after having a plateau for three months from June to August. It is apparent that
Cape
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Town
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 and
Nairobi
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 have relatively stable temperatures throughout the year compared to Cairo. The temperatures witness the highest at just below 30℃ in February and March in
Cape
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Town
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 and
Nairobi
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 respectively,
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 moderately drop down to about 20℃ in August in both cities.
Cape
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Town
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 and
Nairobi
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 have a gradual upward trend until the end of year period despite a little dip in November in
Nairobi
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. The temperatures are significantly varied depending on the geography and the climate between the three cities.
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