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The diorama shows the process of producing electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC). Overall, the system creates electricity using the diffrent temperatures between warm and deep seawater.

The diorama shows the process of producing electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC).
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, the system creates electricity using the
diffrent
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different
 temperatures between warm and deep seawater. First of all, the graph illustrates that the solar energy of the sun heats up the surface
water
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 to boil
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 particles. The solar energy evaporates
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 and changes it into
water
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vapour
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 at 29 degrees.
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 inside the evaporation chamber, saltless
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vapour
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 is separated from salted
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. The
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 of
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 is rotated
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trubine
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turbine
 which is placed at the upper side of the chamber and owing to
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 of that
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turbine
 electricity is generated. After the remaining
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vapour
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 is passed to
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 chamber to be
colled
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cooled
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 down by the cold
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 from the depths of the sea which is used to freeze at
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 stage to 5 degrees and changed from
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vapour
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 to
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, which can be used as drinking
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.And all steps above can be repeated again.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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