The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The chart above shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
The bar chart demonstrates the
number
of males and females engaged in
further
education
over
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Britain
for
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the course of 30 years. It shows whether they were studying full-time or part-time and is divided into three periods.
Overall
, the
number
of men and
women
studying part-time outnumbered those studying full-time by a significant margin.
While
both modes were relatively similar regardless of
sexes
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, there was some variance, especially in
the
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1990, when the
number
of
women
studying part-time increased substantially. With regard to full-time education, male students approximately doubled from around 100,000 in 1970 to over 200,000 by the end of 1991. For
women
, the trajectory was less consistent, rising sharply in the first decade and
then
tapering off to an almost identical level to that of men in the 1990s. The
number
of males engaged in part-time study fluctuated, dipping from one million to 900,000 over three decades. Meanwhile, the
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females’
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part-time
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study steadily increased from nearly 800,000 in 1970 to above a million in 1991. Needless to say, the
number
of
women
who took part in part-time
further
education surpassed that of men in 1991.
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