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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the consumption of
water
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 for three different objectives by percentage in six different areas of the world.
Overall
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, Central
Asia
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 has the most ratio of
water
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 usage in agriculture,
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however
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,however
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Europe
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 has the least ratio. In the industrial
sector
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,sector
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 we have the opposite pattern,
Europe
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 uses the most
water
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 in the Industrial, but Central
Asia
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 uses the least. For domestic purposes, South
America
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 is in the top list,
while
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 South East
Asia
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 and Central
Asia
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 are in the bottom list for
water
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 usage. In the agriculture category, more than four-fifths of
water
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 is used by Central
Asia
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, Africa, and Southeast
Asia
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 88%, 84%, and 81% respectively. In comparison with other countries South
America
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 uses less by 10% about 70%. North
America
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 and
Europe
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use
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 less than 50%, 39% and 32% respectively. In the industrial segment,
Europe
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 and North
America
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use
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 about 50%. South
America
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 uses about tone tenths,
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however
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,however
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 others
use
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 roughly 10%. In the Domestic sector, South
America
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,
Europe
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, and North
America
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use
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 more than 10%,
whereas
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 others
use
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 between 7% to 9%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, europe, america, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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