The welfare association of your neighbourhood wants to organize a summer camp for the children in order to engage them in productive physical activity during the summer vacations. They want to appoint a coach and assistants to teach a sport to the children. A survey has been contemplated to know parents' opinion on the choice of sport. Football: Team sport, refreshing and energizing, good change, children can learn teamwork and coordination, popular sport-followed by many

I personally feel that football is a more suitable option for children in our neighbourhood. Though the other choice is almost equally appealing, I would explain a couple of reasons to justify my choice.
To begin
with, football is a team sport where more children can be played as a group which improves teamwork, coordination and understanding with other teammates at a younger age.
Moreover
, kids feel refreshed & energized during
this
summer vacation and it will be a good change for them in terms of physical activity.
This
sport is followed by all age groups and it became more popular with the recently held 2022 FIFA World
cup
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. We all know how people of different age groups watched all matches of
this
event. So I believe the majority of the kids will show interest in
this
activity.
However
, self-defence training is already in the kid's school academic curriculum and kids might feel bored with martial arts. Considering all the above points, I am of the opinion that engaging children in football sport would be a more beneficial and convincing choice when compared with martial arts.
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