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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage
off
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 spending on five vital categories in the United States,
Canada
, the United Kingdom, and
Japan
 in 2009 and it is easy to see that food and housing, transportation accounted for the highest rate,
whereas
 health care and clothing were lower.
overall
,
three
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 highest figures easily can be seen
the
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 united states spent about 14% on food which was lower than
Japan
 ( about 23% ).
moreover
, the percentage of spending on food in the
uk
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UK
 was higher than in
canada
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 ( 21% compared to 15% ).
According to
 the bar of housing,
america
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 was the highest rate ( about 26%) and the united kingdom was slightly lower than
america
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 because
britain
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 just accounted for about 24%, followed by 23% in
japan
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 and 21% in
canada
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Canada
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. in terms of transportation,
canadians
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 spent 20% of their total expenditures,
while
americans
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, the
british
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British
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,
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japanese
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Japanese
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 from the figure of
category
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the category
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 were just 18%, 15%,
10
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and 10
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%. in the other 2 figures, health care in the
uk
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UK
 was followed
2
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%,
while
canada
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 was as high as
japan
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Japan
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 (about 4%) and
the
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us was the highest.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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