The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of water consumption for 3 different purposes including industrial, domestic and agricultural use in 6 areas of the world. Looking from

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perspective, it is evident that in

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territories namely South

America

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, Africa, Central

Asia

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and South East

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most of the water resources are allocated to farming,

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industrial usage occupies the most amount in North

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and Europe. In terms of agriculture, Central

Asia

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consumer with 88%

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Africa

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for 84% and South East

Asia

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registered

81%respectively

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81 %respectively

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, South

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utilized 71% of its reservoirs for plantation.

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, territories which are located in central parts of

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and

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Asia

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recorded

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share of 7% in domestic consumption

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it is 9% for African regions. Europe and North

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registered almost similar

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section with 15% and 13%respectively. South

America

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is the lead domestic utilizer

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diverting 19% of its resources to domestic purposes.

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, European and North American countries use their water substantially for industrial aims

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diverting 53% and 48% of their reservoirs to

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section;

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percentage is at most14% for Asian areas,19%for South

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and 9% for African territories.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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6
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

205 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumption
irrigation
domestic
industrial
regional disparity
economic structure
sustainable management
water-scarce
population density
urbanization
data trends
resource allocation
percentage distribution
extremes
variations

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The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play video games. What are the positive and negative impacts of playing video games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?

Recent years, the number of crime committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. discuss this issues. give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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