The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of water consumption for 3 different purposes including industrial, domestic and agricultural use in 6 areas of the world. Looking from
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overall
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an overall
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perspective, it is evident that in
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territories namely South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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and South East
Asia
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most of the water resources are allocated to farming,
unlikely
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the
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industrial usage occupies the most amount in North
America
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and Europe. In terms of agriculture, Central
Asia
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is a
leader
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consumer with 88%
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with
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Africa
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for 84% and South East
Asia
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registered
81%respectively
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81 %respectively
.
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, South
America
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utilized 71% of its reservoirs for plantation.
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, territories which are located in central parts of
Asia
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and
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Asia
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recorded
similar
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share of 7% in domestic consumption
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it is 9% for African regions. Europe and North
America
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registered almost similar
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in
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section with 15% and 13%respectively. South
America
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is the lead domestic utilizer
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diverting 19% of its resources to domestic purposes.
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, European and North American countries use their water substantially for industrial aims
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diverting 53% and 48% of their reservoirs to
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section;
while
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this
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percentage is at most14% for Asian areas,19%for South
America
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and 9% for African territories.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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