The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.

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The map illustrates how the

nature

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Nature

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Museum

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has been transformed from 2010 to 2013.

Overall

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, The

Museum

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has Undergone

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Undergone

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underwent

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a major transformation and many facilities have been improved. To begin, the Gorden occupied half of the part in the

Museum

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's east Side but it was completely destroyed and mammals were replaced there. The ocean hall

altered

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was altered

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a little bit better than before. The dinosaurs and ticket desk were maintained in the same location. The ice age and some small space for insects

newly

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were newly

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introduced in the

museum

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. The second part of the building was newly built in 2013. The cafe was located on the left side of the corner.

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, a new shop was opened between the cafe and

lobby

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the lobby

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. There was no change in the lobby. To human origins display

placed

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was placed

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in the middle of the mammals and cafe in the

Museum

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in 2013

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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145 words

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The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.

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