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Many young people nowadays change their jobs or career every few years. Cause ? advantages outweigh disadvantages ?

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It is true that the question of whether to stay all life in the same
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 is more beneficial.
While
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 think that doing the same
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 year-round is better, I would argue that it is better to change
jobs
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 annually. On the one hand, it is argued that there are many benefits when doing the same
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 over and over again.
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, many
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 will feel comfortable as they can
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 with their old colleagues or their friends forever.
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, they will feel much better and can concentrate more on their
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 as they have already adapted to the environment.
Secondly
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, doing the same
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 annually will help
people
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 gain more experience at their
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.
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, if some
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 make a mistake at their
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, they will draw a lesson, regret it and try to improve themselves to be better.
As a result
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, they can sharpen their skills and productivity
as well as
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 have more chances to be promoted.
On the other hand
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, I believe that it is better to change
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 to
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.
Firstly
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, changing
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 will help
people
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 get more experience than those in the same
jobs
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. In fact, when changing
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,
people
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 may find out what
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 is suitable for them, which may lead to
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 satisfaction, feeling more comfortable and easier when working.
Secondly
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, changing
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 will
also
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 challenge
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 more and allow them to learn how to adapt to a new working environment, new colleagues, and many more things.
As a result
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, they have the opportunities to not only break their own limits but
also
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 feel less bored compared to doing the same tasks over and over again when doing the same
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 for their whole life. In conclusion,
although
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 both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that changing
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 from
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 to
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 is better than staying in the same
job
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 all life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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