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Many young people nowadays change their jobs or career every few years. Cause ? advantages outweigh disadvantages ?

#people #change #jobs #career #years
It is true that the question of whether to stay all life in the same
job
 or to change
jobs
 from
time
 to
time
 is more beneficial.
While
 some
people
 think that doing the same
job
 year-round is better, I would argue that it is better to change
jobs
 annually. On the one hand, it is argued that there are many benefits when doing the same
job
 over and over again.
Firstly
, many
people
 will feel comfortable as they can
work
 with their old colleagues or their friends forever.
Therefore
, they will feel much better and can concentrate more on their
work
 as they have already adapted to the environment.
Secondly
, doing the same
job
 annually will help
people
 gain more experience at their
work
.
For example
, if some
people
 make a mistake at their
work
, they will draw a lesson, regret it and try to improve themselves to be better.
As a result
, they can sharpen their skills and productivity
as well as
 have more chances to be promoted.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is better to change
jobs
 from
time
 to
time
.
Firstly
, changing
jobs
 will help
people
 get more experience than those in the same
jobs
. In fact, when changing
jobs
,
people
 may find out what
job
 is suitable for them, which may lead to
job
 satisfaction, feeling more comfortable and easier when working.
Secondly
, changing
jobs
 will
also
 challenge
people
 more and allow them to learn how to adapt to a new working environment, new colleagues, and many more things.
As a result
, they have the opportunities to not only break their own limits but
also
 feel less bored compared to doing the same tasks over and over again when doing the same
job
 for their whole life. In conclusion,
although
 both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that changing
jobs
 from
time
 to
time
 is better than staying in the same
job
 all life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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