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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart demonstrates the comparison of the men's and women's quantity in the different specialities of the certain uni in 2012.
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establishment
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 had more males and major areas for them were engineering, business and science
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 females prefer the educational , arts and medicine sectors. The men were in
minority
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the minority
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 when it comes to pedagogical or arts
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, their part constituted less than 45% (25 per
cent
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 and 44 per
cent
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 respectively). At the same time, their domination was considerable in the developing faculties
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 as engineering (their percentage reached approximately 85%) or science where the number of the male-employees was around 65
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cent
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. But some specialities that were not relative to development
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 contained major men part .
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, the business in 2012 had a number that was similar to their colleagues from the science department, more specifically 55% . In turn,
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female took the education sector by a huge margin reaching around 75% of all researchers in
this
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 field in 2012.
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, the art department admitted more members of the beautiful sex and the number of women constituted about 55% outracing
male
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the male
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 percentage .
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, the numbers in the healthcare area almost levelled out and part of every sex was nearly 50 per
cent
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 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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