Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a debatable issue among individuals whether
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ought to take participate in Nation's army and police force or they are not suitable for these types of employment;
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,I strongly agree with the former statement and will discuss my consideration
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the other point of view. On the one hand,it is scientifically proven that there is
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between the health of men and women.To justify, the majority of
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have less strength as compared to males.
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, women have to suffer from periods on a monthly basis.
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days their bodies are not capable to perform difficult tasks and sometimes they might
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have to take
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.
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,the efficiency of the jobs will decrease.
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,in today's world,
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are capable to perform every task which a man can.
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,women train their bodies either by working hard in gyms or adopting
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lifestyle.So,they should be given equal opportunities because they can handle
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female offenders more conveniently.
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have to suffer from various health problems,I believe that they should be bestowed equal opportunities so that they can handle female offenders.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • stereotypes
  • diversity
  • physical prowess
  • discrimination
  • negotiation skills
  • gender roles
  • morale
  • integrated forces
  • equal opportunities
  • unit cohesion
  • combat effectiveness
  • bias
  • harassment
  • meritocracy
  • transformative
  • empowerment
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