The diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as canned fruits. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions with relevant.

The diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as canned fruits. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions with relevant.
The process diagram featured details the steps
how
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canned fruits
is
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produced from
pears
. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that
this
entirely man-made operation consists of fourteen steps, which can be grouped into three phases including
initial
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picking of pearls to
final
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the final
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canned product. In the first stage of
process
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,
pears
are collected by
hands
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and
then
transport to the factory where
pears
are washed and checked for quality under a magnified view.
Subsequently
,
pears
are taken away, and the good ones are cooled in the storage at a suitable temperature. The
pears
are weighed and
then
graded into different grades. Followed by peeling the
pears
before slicing them, and coring is
also
removed. Prior to sealing
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section, the cored and sliced
pears
are put in the can. Once it is ready, it is cooked and the
sterlizied
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sterilized
cans are filled with
pears
. Having labelled the can,
pears
are stored and
finally
dispatched to the supermarkets for
sales
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.
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