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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#job #salary #consideration
Currently, the topic of finding a suitable occupation is something needed to be considered.
This
 essay disagrees that salary has been the primary factor and there are others before making the decision.
Besides
 stable income, a human being needs to beware of the working environment and companies’ specific requests.
For example
, some expect their employees to work overtime
while
 offering poor pay for it, and some are against employment laws by not paying.
Additionally
, the working environment affects an individual’s productivity.
People
 rather work with friendly and supportive colleagues than those who are jealous. Another aspect is the contributions
people
 may make toward society.
People
 in recent years tend to pay attention to their work.
For instance
, young adults participate in activities of taking care of old
people
 living in nursing homes and teaching orphans and the disabled. Those are organized by non-profit organizations and the government. These
people
 do works as volunteers which makes themselves clear evidence for the opinion mentioned before.
Moreover
Therefore
, money is not everything when it comes to choosing a proper profession but the environment, contribution, and a wise mind to decide based on one’s personal needs and ethics, sometimes hobbies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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