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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the statistic of four material types in percentage that were recycled between
years
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the years
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 1082 to 2010. Looking from
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overall
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an overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent
such
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 materials as aluminium
upwards
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upward
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 the trend throughout the
all designed
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 term,
whereas
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 paper and glass
waste
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 recycling rise insignificantly. The plastic type of
waste
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 was relatively stable. In 1982, there was
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 progression in paper and cardboard recycling, the same can be seen with
the
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glass containers.
Nonetheless
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, paper
waste
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was
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witnessed with
unstable
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an unstable
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 increase
on
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at
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 the peak point in 1994, and
gradual
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a gradual
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 fall to
the
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70 close to 2010 in the same time glass wasting decrease
initially
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 and
reach
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reached
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the
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its
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 lowest point at 40% in 1990. After
what
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that
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 the
precentege
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percentage
 became rise relatively stable and in 2010
gains
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gained
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 60%. Meanwhile, only in 1986
aluminium
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did aluminium
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 cans started recycling and that rise
at
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by
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 more than 40%
during
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over
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 6 years. Looking at the
last
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 category which is plastic
waste
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 it appeared comparatively the latest and started slowly increasing up to 10
precent
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per cent
to
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in
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the
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2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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