The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The maps illustrate how the waterfront
area
in Darwin changed over the 4-year period.
It is clear that
most of the industrial areas have been turned into forests and residential areas.
In addition
, the
town
’s infrastructure was
also
renovated with the addition of
a
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harbors
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and more footpaths. Looking at
map
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Map
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1 , we can see that the major part of the
town
was covered by the industrial
area
.To the north of
this
building was a lake, some trees and
industrial
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area
.There was
also
a footpath which encircled the centre of the
town
. There were two swimming pools beside the footpath and a fishing
area
In 2014, the industrial
area
was demolished to make room for a number of trees and amenities. In the North of the map,
while
the industrial
area
has been replaced by the swimming pool, there were no
instead
of the school, convention centre and lake.In the centre of the
town
, there are three residential buildings that have been built adjacent to the three old buildings.
In addition
,a university building was erected to the West of the
area
.In the seashore of the
town
, a
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harbours
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harbors
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was constructed
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