You have gained admission in a prestigious college. Now you have to arrange for the accommodation. write a letter to the college authorities stating your likes and dislike in the choice of food and accommodation.

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Dear college authorities, Hope

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Firstly

I would love to thank you for the opportunity you gave me, for me, it is an

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THE SPELLING honour The spelling of

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part of your prestigious college. There is only one thing that concerns me, and it regards my accommodation. I want to make you aware that for me it is not a big issue sharing my room with someone else, I like to have roommates and socialize with new people. But what I don't really like is to share the bathroom with

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many people. Is there any chance

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a room with private toilets? Regarding my food preferences,

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I have a difficult taste. I don't like cheeses and meat, given that I would prefer to have a diet, more vegetarian and

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. I want

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you that I have a severe allergy to peas and beans. Is it possible to arrange a food schedule based on my dietary preferences? Sorry for the

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I might cause you. Looking forward to start studying there. Kind regards Antonio Lecca

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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