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You have gained admission in a prestigious college. Now you have to arrange for the accommodation. write a letter to the college authorities stating your likes and dislike in the choice of food and accommodation.

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Dear college authorities, Hope
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 email finds you well.
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 I would love to thank you for the opportunity you gave me, for me, it is an
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CHANGE
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 THE SPELLING honour The spelling of
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 part of your prestigious college. There is only one thing that concerns me, and it regards my accommodation. I want to make you aware that for me it is not a big issue sharing my room with someone else, I like to have roommates and socialize with new people. But what I don't really like is to share the bathroom with
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 many people. Is there any chance
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 a room with private toilets? Regarding my food preferences,
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 I have a difficult taste. I don't like cheeses and meat, given that I would prefer to have a diet, more vegetarian and
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. I want
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inform
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 you that I have a severe allergy to peas and beans. Is it possible to arrange a food schedule based on my dietary preferences? Sorry for the
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 I might cause you. Looking forward to start studying there. Kind regards Antonio Lecca
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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