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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 amd 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compparisons where relevent.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 amd 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compparisons where relevent.
The chart depicts the amount of money a
country's
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country
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 exports in different product categories from 2015 to 2016. The table illustrates the comparison of two
years’s
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 percentage change in values. It is obvious the percentage of
the
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apply
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Petroleum products and engineered goods is the two highest in both 2015 and 2016 among the five categories,
while
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 the
figure
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 for textiles in change has the highest. In
details
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detail
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, earnings from exporting Petroleum
product
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products
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 scored the top one place,
contributed
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contributing
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 over 60
billions
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billion
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 in both
year
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years
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.
Gemsand
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Gems and
 jewellery
are
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is
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 the only
one
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apply
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category out of five that show a
dowenard
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downward
 trend in the
figure
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, from approximately 42 per cent
2015
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in 2015
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of
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apply
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decrease
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a decrease
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 in values. The
figure
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 for textiles has increased dramatically from 2015 to 2016,
contributed
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contributing
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 15.24 per cent of
rise
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the rise
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 comparing the two years. The percentage of the increase
of
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in
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 agricultural products is the lowest(0.8%), which is the only
figure
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 that
lower
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 1 per cent of growth among the other categories.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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