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The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#situation #teacher #students #class #year
It is clear that
 development in technology is playing a major role in delivering
education
 today. There is a view that by the end of
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 2050, the typical presence of
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 and students in
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the classroom
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 will cease to exist.
However
, In my opinion, I agree with
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 statement to
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 extent as
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 will still be certain scenarios that shall remain as it is.
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 pace with which
education
 infrastructure is growing and adapting, it can be established that societies are accepting the virtual
education
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, over the duration of
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 decade, fifty
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 of the total academic
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 are now being offered online and by the end of
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 decade, it will be one-hundred
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. Recent technological advancements,
such
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artificial
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 exams being proctored using web-cam
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 of individuals in
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 redundant. Evidently, with all the
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 ways of teaching, the typical presence of the students and a teacher in school classes is questionable.
However
, I believe certain
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scenarios
 between teachers and students are
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 to remain unchanged for possibly the next
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. As an example,
childrens
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 will still be asked for regular
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, assignment submission and regular
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. Failing to which, they could face
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 consequences.
Furthermore
, the most obvious problem of
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 being unattentive in classes and facing punishment would stay unchanged, even if the lectures are delivered virtually.
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 there might be changes in the way
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 are punished so as to motivate them to study,
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that shall not hinder the regular arguments between them. To recapitulate, with the advancement of technology and changing behaviour of
education
 delivery by 2050, In my opinion, certain, traditional scenarios between teachers and
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,
such
 as arguments, and punishments shall stay unchanged.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • virtual learning
  • online education
  • individualized learning
  • personalized learning
  • facilitative role
  • collaborative learning
  • evolve
  • adapt
  • social interaction
  • communication skills
  • teacher-student relationships
  • flexible learning
  • lifelong learning
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