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Your English-spaekng fiend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your firend. In your email recommmend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explainn how your friend could learn this sport Suggest that you both learn this sport together

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Dear
Suian
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Susan
. I hope you are doing well. It's been a long time that we have not
meet
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. Despite
of
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the fact that I hope you will find
this
 letter helpful since I am going to suggest a new sports, which you were asking about in our
last
 meeting. Going forward, how about if I suggest
a
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badminton which is so intensive and effective for
overall
 body health. Because I reckon that you were struggling to reduce body fat and trim muscles as well. The
game
 which I recommend
you
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to you
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 does not require much more knowledge and equipment.
This
 sport can be played at any
places
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place
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 indoor or outdoor. The good thing is that you need only two players
where
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who
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they
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can be your family members or any friends and a pair of badminton with a shuttle cock but you can buy
extra
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an extra
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 shuttle cock if you wish to
,
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 because
usually
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,usually
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 it's getting
damage
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 easily which might interrupt your play. I believe that
this
game
 will be suitable for you. If you find any difficulties
while
 playing
this
 sport you can reach out to me on phone calls as well.
However
, I assure
that
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you that
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 we will play
this
game
 together very soon since I am going to take a 10 days
summer
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of summer
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 vacation from next week on Monday so most probably I will be there on Wednesday and we will enjoy the
game
. I cannot wait to see you again. Best Regards Shiba T=
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