People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the statement to a full extent. As the average life expectancy goes up, so does the number of years a person can be healthy and able to perform the tasks required of him in
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workforce.
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that person shall serve more years. If it was the case that, even with increasing life expectancy people serve the same years as before, that will eventually result in having
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people to serve for a larger population. So it seems quite natural for the retirement age to be brought up
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average life expectancy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • financial resources
  • retirement fund
  • cognitive functions
  • social interaction
  • wealth of experience
  • expertise
  • social security systems
  • dependency ratio
  • employers
  • adapt workplaces
  • job retraining
  • flexible working hours
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