the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.

The bar chart illustrates which amount of men and women had been studying in two different major study modes
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as, full-
time
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time
during the period of 1970 to 1990.
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, being the dominant category in female
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had highlighted an increasing trend where an upward trend was there for full-
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males with an uneven distribution
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education
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males; in the year 1970, the average engagement for
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time
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eighty
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approximately two hundred twenty
thousand
in the year 1990.
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, in 1980 there was a small drop and again it rise up to nearly nine hundred
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. When we compare
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female
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, in 1970 at least seven hundred
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also
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the beginning of the period
eighty
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females entering
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the end of the period it
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two hundred twenty
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time education
  • part-time education
  • further education
  • gender comparison
  • trend analysis
  • notable increase
  • decrease
  • consistent trend
  • educational patterns
  • substantial differences
  • preferences
  • evolve
  • societal factors
  • economic influences
  • accessibility
  • job market
  • gender roles
  • projections
  • implications
  • educational policy
  • workforce development
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