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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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Chorleywood is a village nearby the capital of
great
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Britian
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Britain
 whose number of people living there increased constantly since the middle of
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the nineteenth
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 century.The map below depicts the development of the village.
Overall
,the village changed dramatically and improved so much.
In
addition
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 logistic and transportation roads were built during the time period. First of all,during 1868-1883 most of the territory of the town developed,
also
 there were main
road
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 that provided opportunities to travel.In 1883 in the
city
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 local authorities started to develop territory a bit righter from the centre and all of
this
 continued until 1922.
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,
government
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 began improving the territory nearby
previous
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 developed
area
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 and ended in 1970.Right after that.
motorway
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 was built along
main
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 road and
future
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 railway.Following that,in the same year the process of improving land
on
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 the right top corner and the area
in
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 the bottom of the map.
In
addition
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 railway was built a long time ago in 1909,which gave
the
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 profound impact
in
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developing
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 of the city.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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