The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates data on sports that people in New Zealand were likely to participate in most in 2002.
Overall
, the proportion of
boys
and
girls
was similar in athletics, basketball, and tennis.
However
, that distribution in cricket, martial arts, netball, soccer, swimming, and other sports was not equivalent. The percentage of
girls
in athletics is about 4%, compared to 3% of
boys
. Basketball was a little more preferred by
boys
than by
girls
. The figures were slightly over 6% and 5% respectively.
Likewise
, tennis
also
attracted
boys
a bit more than
girls
.
Boys
’ involvement in
this
activity was nearly 8%,
whereas
the figure for
girls
was about 7%. Around 25% of participants in netball were
girls
,
while
the proportion of
boys
in
this
sport was nearly 0%.
In contrast
, the figure for
boys
in soccer was almost 5 times higher than their female counterparts, at just under 25% and approximately 5% respectively.
Additionally
, cricket
also
saw a significant difference between the number of
boys
(10%) and
girls
(slightly over 0%).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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