The pie chart shows women in poverty in the United States and bar chart compares poverty rates by gender.

The pie chart shows women in poverty in the United States and bar chart compares poverty rates by gender.
The two charts illustrate the rate of
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in poverty in different household
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and the level of poverty by sex and
age
. Generally speaking, the majority of poor
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are single
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without
children
, followed by
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single
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women
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with
children
. In terms of gender and
age
, both
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in the non-working
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have the highest trend in poverty,
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decreased
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time and rose again at the
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age
. A closer look at the pie chart reveals that more than
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half of poor
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figure
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belong to
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women
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with no
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dependent, which was 54%.
This
figure
was 28% more than that
figure
of poor
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women
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with dependent
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. Only 20%
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lived in poor in 2008. Particularly, only 12% of
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woman
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women
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with
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dependent and 8% of those without
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children
was poor. In terms of gender and sex,
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5
age
group had the highest poor rate in the chart: more than 20%.
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for both men and
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then
slighly
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slightly
dropped until the
age
of 45 - 54 to 6% and 7% respectively. Only the
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in
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age
group did not follow the trend when there was more than 20% of poor rate, which was equal to the
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5
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group. At the
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age
, the
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of
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poor
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women
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generally increased to 15%,
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men continue to decrease to 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words woman, age, children, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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