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The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar illustrates the total percentages of students participating in four different kinds of academies in eight
years
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 from 2000 to 2009. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that Community institutions which were the only increased pattern significantly grew up in all
years
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,
while
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 leftover faculty which none of them rose in eight
years
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 period subsided throughout the
years
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.
Firstly
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, Specialist Hall which started the table at 12 per
cent
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 declined by one before finishing the data at 10 numbers, which was the least figure in 2009 compared to the other departments, in the final term surveyed.
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, Grammar academy students were considerably higher than specialists with 12 per
cent
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 and
this
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 figure gradually reduced by 5 in 2005 before completing the table at 12. Followed by, Voluntary-controlled departments, which were the biggest number at 52 per
cent
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 in the first term, dramatically dropped by 32 per
cent
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 in the final period.
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, Community institutions, which were the only expanded number , stood at 12 before finishing the table with 58 per
cent
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 which was the biggest statistic in the
last
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 stage.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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