The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

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female unemployment rates have been rising since 2013 and the country has been experiencing 68% and down 6,5 % in 2014 .

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there is no shortage of female unemployment rates for men . By 2013 ,it had been estimated over half

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% in Wales. The rest was just the usual numbers for most people to be able to get the job done and

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they had been working hard for it all day so it wasn’t that big deal but it’s not like I don’t think it’s a big problem. By 2013 it had been done and the fact they didn’t even know what they were doing is a huge mistake for them because they are not going anywhere and they are not allowed to do anything about

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anymore. Northern Ireland had been 5,6% in 2013 years ago so it was not even close but 2014 in 4,6 % of people are still alive today and it’s still a big issue today

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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message ?

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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