The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
The bar chart demonstrates the proportion change in the share of foreign students among university graduates between 2001 and 2006 in various Canadian
provinces
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. It is measured in percentages.
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, it can be seen that throughout the period from 2001 to
2006
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2006,
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the level of participation of international learners experienced a significant rise,
while
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Ontario remained in the lowest position among all these
provinces
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. New Brunswick sharply increased and reached its highest point,
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which
a approximately 12
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per cent
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in 2006,
although
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five years before it was below 10%,
whereas
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Ontario's highest result in 2006 was substantially lower than New Brunswick's lowest point. It is evident that Ontario had the lowest figure among all
provinces
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, and it was nearly 4%. In the rest of the
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provinces
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provinces,
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there was a gradual climb, but in two
provinces
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(Nova Scotia and British Columbia
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),
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values were almost the same in 2006, at close to 11%.
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, in 2001 Nova Scotia's value (virtually 7%) was considerably higher than British Columbia's (practically 4%). The other
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excluding
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, excluding
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Quebec
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Quebec,
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had practically the same results a negligible difference. Quebec's percentage was just above 5% in both 2001 and 2006 (almost 7% in 2001 and 8% in 2006),
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the results for Alberta,Manitoba, and Newfoundland and Labrador were below 5% in 2001 and still under 10% in 2006.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words provinces with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • female unemployment
  • data representation
  • overall trend
  • disparities
  • regional differences
  • insight
  • analysis
  • significant changes
  • employment policies
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