The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
Female
unemployment
changed in 2013 and 2014.
Unemployment
percentage
decreased in England, Wales and Northern Ireland. Unfortunately,in Scotland
unemployment
persentage
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percentage
growed
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grew
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. In 2013 England was
country
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a country
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where
unemployment
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the unemployment
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percentage
was higher. But in 2014
this
percentage
a little decreased. In Wales from 2013 was a normal
percentage
of
unemployment
. Fortunately, 2014 has become even less. Northern Ireland’s
unemployment
percentage
was a little more than
Wales
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Wales's
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in 2013.
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2014 became the country with the smallest
percentage
of unemployed of all four. Only in Scotland
persentage
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percentage
of
unemployment
increased
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.
Therefore
, they became the most unemployed country in 2014. We can observe that in three countries carelessness decreased, only in Scotland it increased.
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