The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table provides information on
amount
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the amount
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of students
attended
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who attended
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different types of Secondary
schools
from the
year
2000 to the
year
2009.
Overall
, Community
Schools
have witnessed
a
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rapid growth
whereas
,
rest
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the rest
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of the
Schools
have seen an immense drop in admission by the end of the
period
. At the beginning of the
period
, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
had the most pupils which were at 52%
however
, it started to shrank in attendance
by
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in
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the following years and by the
year
2009, it was around 20%.
Moreover
, Grammar
schools
and Specialist
Schools
also
observed the same impact and by the end of the
period
, they
also
depleted to less than 12%.
Furthermore
, Community
Schools
were the only school which showed substantial growth in admission throughout the
period
. In the
year
2005, it jumped to approximately 20% increase and by the
year
2009, it became the first school to have almost 60% pupils.
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