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You have recently bought a product after seeing a company’s advertisement. You then discovered that the purchased product did not match the description of the advertisement. Write a letter to the manager of that company. In your letter; • describe the product you bought • state the description the advertisement gave of the product • say what you want the company to do to make it up to you

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I purchased a red coloured iPhone 14
pro max
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 worth 500 dollars
having
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, having
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 256GB internal storage and 6
GB
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ram
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last
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 week through your website. I would like to thank the delivery team
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I
received
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 it within a few days after the order.
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, it was not as same as advertised on the website. Because on the online portal
in
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 the
description
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description,
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 it mentioned a red-coloured iPhone 14
pro max
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Pro Max
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 with 256GB internal storage and 8GB
ram
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but
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 what I have received is a bit different
than
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 what is exactly mentioned in the product description. I would be more delighted if you could either provide me with a full refund or replace a new phone with the same product description which was stated in the advertisement. Should you require any
further
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information
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 please do not hesitate to revert. Regards, Shiba Kumar Banjara

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coherence
Have one clear point in each paragraph; put ideas in order.
task response
Say what you want the firm to do and by when, and keep a kind tone.
content
You say what you bought and what the ad said.
tone
Polite start and end.
content
You ask for money back or a new phone.
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