All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

In recent years,

obesity

has received more and more media attention around the world

due to

its substantial

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on human life. Not only does

this

problem affect children, but it

also

impacts

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people

. I personally believe that only when

people

exercise and eat healthy

food

, both of which are equally important for maintaining

health

, could

this

challenging issue be tackled. The reasons

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an increase

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obesity

have been identified in

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as well as

how they can be overcome. One of the main causes of

obesity

is eating unhealthy

food

,

for

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junk

food

, takeaways and ready-made meals,

as well as

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of fresh fruit and vegetables in the diet, which can be detrimental to

health

.

This

problem can only be solved if the

government

ensures that healthy

food

is more affordable as often poorer

people

can only afford unhealthy

food

, and the same is true of fresh fruits and vegetables which are extremely expensive.

Additionally

, schools and companies should both offer only healthy eating options in the canteen.

Moreover

, the

government

can make public education films informing and helping the general public to follow a healthier, more active lifestyle and making them aware of the risks of an unhealthy diet. Another reason for the rise of

obesity

in recent years is the lack of

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physical

sport

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.

For instance

, many

people

drive everywhere

instead

of walking regardless of the distance. As a solution to

this

, the

government

should build better sports facilities in schools and the pupils could be educated on

this

issue and be encouraged to do more sports. What is more, companies could reward employees for following healthy lifestyle patterns and doing something more active,

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cycling to work. In summary, in my viewpoint,

this

phenomenon, which is terribly challenging in the world today could only be prevented if

people

eat healthy

food

, and do regular physical exercise which are both essential for good

health

.

Similarly

, the

government

should do its part by providing better sports facilities in schools and informing the general population about the

health

risks associated with

obesity

.