All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

In recent years,

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has received more and more media attention around the world

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on human life. Not only does

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problem affect children, but it

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. I personally believe that only when

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exercise and eat healthy

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, both of which are equally important for maintaining

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challenging issue be tackled. The reasons

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obesity

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have been identified in

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how they can be overcome. One of the main causes of

obesity

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is eating unhealthy

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junk

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, takeaways and ready-made meals,

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of fresh fruit and vegetables in the diet, which can be detrimental to

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problem can only be solved if the

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ensures that healthy

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is more affordable as often poorer

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can only afford unhealthy

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, and the same is true of fresh fruits and vegetables which are extremely expensive.

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, schools and companies should both offer only healthy eating options in the canteen.

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, the

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can make public education films informing and helping the general public to follow a healthier, more active lifestyle and making them aware of the risks of an unhealthy diet. Another reason for the rise of

obesity

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in recent years is the lack of

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physical

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.

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, many

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drive everywhere

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of walking regardless of the distance. As a solution to

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, the

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should build better sports facilities in schools and the pupils could be educated on

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issue and be encouraged to do more sports. What is more, companies could reward employees for following healthy lifestyle patterns and doing something more active,

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cycling to work. In summary, in my viewpoint,

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phenomenon, which is terribly challenging in the world today could only be prevented if

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eat healthy

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, and do regular physical exercise which are both essential for good

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, the

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should do its part by providing better sports facilities in schools and informing the general population about the

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risks associated with

obesity

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