All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

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In recent years,
obesity
has received more and more media attention around the world
due to
its substantial
impacts
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on human life. Not only does
this
problem affect children, but it
also
impacts
grown up
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people
. I personally believe that only when
people
exercise and eat healthy
food
, both of which are equally important for maintaining
health
, could
this
challenging issue be tackled. The reasons
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an increase
of
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obesity
have been identified in
this
essay
as well as
how they can be overcome. One of the main causes of
obesity
is eating unhealthy
food
,
for
instance
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junk
food
, takeaways and ready-made meals,
as well as
lack
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of fresh fruit and vegetables in the diet, which can be detrimental to
health
.
This
problem can only be solved if the
government
ensures that healthy
food
is more affordable as often poorer
people
can only afford unhealthy
food
, and the same is true of fresh fruits and vegetables which are extremely expensive.
Additionally
, schools and companies should both offer only healthy eating options in the canteen.
Moreover
, the
government
can make public education films informing and helping the general public to follow a healthier, more active lifestyle and making them aware of the risks of an unhealthy diet. Another reason for the rise of
obesity
in recent years is the lack of
doing
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physical
sport
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.
For instance
, many
people
drive everywhere
instead
of walking regardless of the distance. As a solution to
this
, the
government
should build better sports facilities in schools and the pupils could be educated on
this
issue and be encouraged to do more sports. What is more, companies could reward employees for following healthy lifestyle patterns and doing something more active,
for
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cycling to work. In summary, in my viewpoint,
this
phenomenon, which is terribly challenging in the world today could only be prevented if
people
eat healthy
food
, and do regular physical exercise which are both essential for good
health
.
Similarly
, the
government
should do its part by providing better sports facilities in schools and informing the general population about the
health
risks associated with
obesity
.
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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Overweight
  • Epidemic
  • Sedentary
  • Processed food
  • Fast food
  • Nutritional education
  • Awareness
  • Stress
  • Emotional eating
  • Genetic factors
  • Access
  • Healthy food options
  • Marketing
  • Urbanization
  • Lifestyles
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