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Some people think that schools stop teaching students by using books, because students find them boring and that children can learn from films, TV, video games and computer instaed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #schools #students #books #children #films #tv #video #games #computer
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, using
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modern
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instead
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. Some people prefer the first one,
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because
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knowledge
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, others believe that the new
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learning
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,
books
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 and until today it still
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 the most popular studying tool in the world. Not only it is practical for
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schools
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 in different
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financial
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,
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 lay a
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solid foundation
,
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 thinking, for students’ future. Take the basic math rule that we
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learned in the first grade as an example. Generally, bearing the boring details of knowledge in the book is
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books
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, we have to admit
computer
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computers
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 and
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modern media
 have better
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abilities
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stimulating
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into
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 practice.
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, in a down-to-earth opinion, the truth is that nearly all
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acadamic
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academic
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exams
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 relating
books
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never
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, try not to screw up the exam is the core task.
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 the other hand, if we want to learn knowledge that has a large quantity, the boring book still
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 no way to skip. As
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consquance
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consequence
consequences
, in the
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beginning learning
, films, TV, games and computers could be useful
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assistance
 to help students to learn knowledge from
books
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,
books
 are always can not be replaced by them.
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