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Global environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nations not of poorer nations Do you agree with this opinion?

#responsibility #nations
Environment
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issues
is
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are
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 one of the significant
concern
 in the world.
Environment
issues
 included global warming, trash in the sea,
cutting
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and cutting
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 the tree. These are all part of environmental
issues
. Environmental
issues
is
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 essential to fix it seriously. We can fix the environmental
issues
 by reducing plastic bags, increasing electric
car
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cars
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, put the items that we don't use
on
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in
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 the bin.
Next
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The next
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 part will discuss
about
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Should global
environment
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environmental
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issues
 are the responsibility of rich
nations
 not of poorer
nations
? Global environmental
issues
 are
significant
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a significant
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concern
 not only in developed
country
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countries
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 but
also
less
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in less
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 developed
country
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countries
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.
While
 is true that more developed
countries
 are generally more urbanized which
contribute
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the
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concern
 of global
environment
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environmental
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issues
,
but
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less developed
countries
also
 should take responsibility
of
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for
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 global
environment
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issues
, that's
becuase
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because
 in the world they are many
countries
that
is
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are
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 poor
nations
especially
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,especially
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 in Africa and some of Latin America and Southeast Asia.
The poor
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Poor
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nations
 like less developed
countries
 can help global environmental
issues
 by introducing
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a policy
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policy
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policies
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 that related to global environmental
issues
such
 as reducing
plastic related
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plastic-related
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 items,
introduced
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and introduced
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recycle
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recycling
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part
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parts
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 for the garbage in many places in the country.
These policy
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This policy
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 can help global environmental
issues
. In conclusion, I disagree that global environmental
issues
 are solely the
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 of rich
nations
 because many
countries
 in the world are poor or less developed
countries
 and they can help significantly
reducing
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reduce
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 global environmental
issues
.
Environment
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Environmental
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issues
 are
concern
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a concern
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 in both rich and poor
nations
countries
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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