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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The map represents the plan for the
university
 sports centre in the present and how it will be developed in the future.
Overall
, the size of the
university
 will increase and it is going to be bigger. Significant changes will be in outdoor courts, which are situated on the west and east of the
university
. Looking to the west, the outdoor courts will be transformed into a leisure pool. Changing room is going to be built on the south of the same side, which is connected to the leisure pool.
While
 the entrance will be modified by building a sports shop and a Cafe. With regards to the 15m pool and what is surrounded by, will not show any change.
Moreover
, the gym will be extended. The east of the
university
 will show significant development, which includes two dance studios and a big changing room. Meanwhile, the outdoor courts in the east will be knocked down to make way for the sports hall.
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